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Hmm haven't read much of war related stories but so far so good! The protag seems alright rather realistic in his reactions to the participation in the recent battles. The relationship between the cadets/private seems reasonable... Haven't seen him complain about the uniform(bruh the boots are awful, most of end up with sweaty and blistered toes or maybe he's already used to it?) and the heavy load which is surprising. Not sure if i missed it but maybe add more details about the gun powder filled air, maybe more to the deafening gun/artillery. Not sure it it's relevant but, somethings to note, any if little soot in the barrel is enough to derail the shot by miles, same goes for bullets that underwent some physical abuse, based on the conditions and their sweaty asses meaning humid conditions, bullets are prone to either just straight up not work or delayed(meaning after trigger, the bullets doesn't shoot so you would have to either wait until it does or risk chance of it blowing up in ur face) use this to add to the MC's misery :)
Reincarnated In A World I never Wanted
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I don't particularly want my protagonist to suffer that much, just a little hint of pain would do. For the uncomfortable boot situation. I never really thought about that, to be honest. I'll try my best to add more detail in my future chapters next time, though usually, it depends if my mind imagined a much more detailed event. Thanks for this advice btw. I'll keep it in mind.
ye i was jus reminded of the time where a bullet almost exploded in my fingers….but it was cool… or hot xD
StevenFrost:I don't particularly want my protagonist to suffer that much, just a little hint of pain would do. For the uncomfortable boot situation. I never really thought about that, to be honest. I'll try my best to add more detail in my future chapters next time, though usually, it depends if my mind imagined a much more detailed event. Thanks for this advice btw. I'll keep it in mind.