Review Detail of Moyin_Ale in The Villains are After Me

The novel isn't one of the best out there it's just okay. I had a few problems with the novel though. 1.There were a lot of grammatical errors, I'll really suggest that you'd get a proofreader 2. You kept jumping from one plot to another, I couldn't keep up and I even got confused cause I kept wondering how I got to that part of the plot or where the plot popped out from 3. Some scenes were not properly fleshed out and you failed to give proper information for important plot points. Like the scene where 2 kids were kidnapped, after they were kidnapped where did Louis take them to, what did he do them? And how was Louis able to easily get to frid base and destroy the machine when it was labelled as dangerous, at least some casualties must have been suffered. 4. I also felt that you should have talked a bit more about their childhood instead of instantly time skipping them to when they were 18. I really wished to see more interactions between Mikael and Louis