Review Detail of Harsh_Kronos31 in Returner's Odeyssey

After the 1st chapter i thought that there were some inconsistencies regarding the narration of the story & the events, how we were introduced to Amaru's character and his backstory..it seemt a lil bit rushed or missing a lil depth to the 'event' that happens later. This chapt• does a good job on the continuation from where we left off but still Amaru comfortably using the 'game system' & its different things such as the 'inventory portal' , his reactions to seeing how it reponds to his questions as his in-game choices seemt a rather bit odd..🤔 but this is only my POV,i only mean it as constructive critisicm(im invested in the story as a reader🤩).This is your 1st project & youre doing a great job at that and i know the content will be improved over the course of the later chapters..✌🏻✌🏻 Good luck & waiting for chap-3🤩