well, I got nothing much to say, I like the way it is right now. if you're planning on adding many characters to the story, it's better to make a list and reminders for it early

bad grammar and story is lower than average. bad grammar and story is lower than average. bad grammar and story is lower than average. bad grammar and story is lower than average.

A good start. I like how the mc died. It's good to die at the age of 104 Lots of potential Keep it up and don't drop the story. Exp exp exp exp exp exp exp exp exp exp exp exp exp exp exp exp exp exp exp exp exp exp exp exp exp exp exp exp exp exp exp exp exp exp exp exp exp exp exp exp exp exp exp exp exp exp exp exp exp exp exp exp exp exp exp exp exp exp exp exp exp exp exp exp exp exp exp exp exp exp exp exp exp exp exp exp exp exp exp exp exp exp exp exp exp exp exp exp exp exp exp exp exp exp exp exp exp exp exp exp exp exp exp

The story is cool, but the writing is really bad. The story is cool, but the writing is really bad. The story is cool, but the writing is really bad. The story is cool, but the writing is really bad.

This is one epic, awesome and f****** interesting fan fic. This is also the first fan fic that I ever rated. It was awesome and the comedy was fantastic to say the least. I don't give spoilers so I am not telling but the story kept me hooked till the last page. I really recommend you to read it!!!!

A very good fanfic if you like slow paced slice-of-life the only thing that slightly downgrades the experience is the grammar mistakes, which can be easily ignored

this isnt a harem right.... it better not be ................................................................... or ill punt you to the moon

The story starts off with, no offence, shitty grammar. Of course, it smooths out later in the chapter. (that, or I just learned to ignore it, Im leaning towards the former though) But yeah, it got quite a few laughs out of me which is suprising because I dont do that often. If you can get over the first few chapters of shitty grammar, give it a read, very good.

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