Review Detail of The_Sheep in Lazy Life As The Primordial

* Critical text (points to improve and those things) * I just read everything, in the matter of grammar there is not much to talk about, only that you can improve in some aspects, as in the last comment I made on the use of "He" and also try to put yourself more in the character's place (female character * I know it's weird to put yourself in the shoes of a woman, but it helps a lot later when describing, creating a female character or trying to show her personality in the novel * and male character), another important thing that many authors of fan-fic don't, try, is to understand the character's personality, and not only try to clone him in the fanfic, notice and understand the character's personality makes the story more fluid, interesting and unique, because you won't have to copy what he does and speak, because you will already know what he can do / talk in each situation, I recommend you to read the fan-fic Annihilation Maker DXD, the author uses the personality of each character well without having to force or copy * (I am not saying that you copy or force the characters, just that you need to understand more the personality of each character and not only write what you saw in the novel / anime, it will make the development of the story and characters more interesting and original) *. Two other important points, first, try to change the original story more, it's cool to see a fanfic, but it's boring to see the same things that happened in the anime happen in the fanfic, try to create more unusual and interesting situations that could possibly happen but it didn't happen in anime, secondly, I realized that you don’t really like to write romance, and you tend to push a lot, you don’t have to push (probably because of the boring readers who are boring and want a harem at the first 10 chapters) do whatever you think more interesting (keeping in mind the personality of the characters etc) doesn’t have to be a super fast harem, the MC can just ask girls to go with him, and with time and situations they’ll create bonds and feelings, not need to be that fast (**** readers who want to see a harem in the first 10 chapters).