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The_SheepLv24yr
2021-02-04 02:20

* Critical text (points to improve and those things) * I just read everything, in the matter of grammar there is not much to talk about, only that you can improve in some aspects, as in the last comment I made on the use of "He" and also try to put yourself more in the character's place (female character * I know it's weird to put yourself in the shoes of a woman, but it helps a lot later when describing, creating a female character or trying to show her personality in the novel * and male character), another important thing that many authors of fan-fic don't, try, is to understand the character's personality, and not only try to clone him in the fanfic, notice and understand the character's personality makes the story more fluid, interesting and unique, because you won't have to copy what he does and speak, because you will already know what he can do / talk in each situation, I recommend you to read the fan-fic Annihilation Maker DXD, the author uses the personality of each character well without having to force or copy * (I am not saying that you copy or force the characters, just that you need to understand more the personality of each character and not only write what you saw in the novel / anime, it will make the development of the story and characters more interesting and original) *. Two other important points, first, try to change the original story more, it's cool to see a fanfic, but it's boring to see the same things that happened in the anime happen in the fanfic, try to create more unusual and interesting situations that could possibly happen but it didn't happen in anime, secondly, I realized that you don’t really like to write romance, and you tend to push a lot, you don’t have to push (probably because of the boring readers who are boring and want a harem at the first 10 chapters) do whatever you think more interesting (keeping in mind the personality of the characters etc) doesn’t have to be a super fast harem, the MC can just ask girls to go with him, and with time and situations they’ll create bonds and feelings, not need to be that fast (**** readers who want to see a harem in the first 10 chapters).

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Darkstar11051999
Darkstar11051999Author

Noted. Thank you for the feedback.

Overlord_1000
Overlord_1000Lv4

I advise you to do what he said about the harem is also to give yourself a limit like 8.9 girl for the harem to avoid breaking your head to remember all the girls are their personality. seriously I read a very good fanfic with a large harem I read it (I hate harems on bass) and I continued because it was very well executed but the author gave up because there was too much of girl is he gained a huge headache from her.

Darkstar11051999:Noted. Thank you for the feedback.
Darkstar11051999
Darkstar11051999Author

I will try. Thanks for the feedback.

Overlord_1000:I advise you to do what he said about the harem is also to give yourself a limit like 8.9 girl for the harem to avoid breaking your head to remember all the girls are their personality. seriously I read a very good fanfic with a large harem I read it (I hate harems on bass) and I continued because it was very well executed but the author gave up because there was too much of girl is he gained a huge headache from her.
Overlord_1000
Overlord_1000Lv4

also about the maximum number is so that we reader we do not worry to remember who is who is where it comes from

Darkstar11051999:I will try. Thanks for the feedback.
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