Review Detail of Xreth in Otherworldy Arcade Shop

Hi, Author here. I wrote this novel as a practice in writing characters which is why the immediate conflict in the story revolved around the main character having a multiple personality disorder. This is also inspired by novels like Black Tech Internet Cafe System, Gamers of the Underworld, and Almighty Video Game Designer. Currently, I'm trying to use two styles of writing, first is the explain everything word by word because I literally just can't. The other is keeping dialogues and actions going as a way to show foreshadowing for the story. Hopefully, I'd be able to properly communicate the story through those words. I just wish Inkstone supported markdown so I can properly differentiate thoughts, dialogues, system messages and all that jazz through italics and bolds.