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Beretta
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2021-02-07 20:52

interesting story but man, do you need to think about who the author is talking about. they really need to work on their personal adjectives.

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Beretta
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I meant pronouns

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AzurthaLv11

It's machine translated, so from my experience with translating foreign languages to English syntax, if it doesn't make sense, drop all pronouns and sub in other ones mentally until you can gain a semblance or see if you don't need a pronoun at all. Almost always drop pronouns from the middle of sentences. Like, it's not the poster's fault per se, more that they just didn't fully translate. You'd need an editor to do it, and I'm not about to because I'm not getting paid by the author.

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