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theychimirollin
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Awesome read! There's only three chapters so far but the world and the characters are beautifully painted (or war-painted). I'm a sucker for wars on paper, both steel-armed and political. And I can't wait to get to the latter. Also excited on what will become of Cornelius and Commodus. Only reason I didn't give full marks was the shifting tenses. But that can be easily remedied. I'd suggest to pick one and stick to it throughout. It's minor though and only slightly took me away from the fantasy. I hope this comment doesn't come off as harsh criticism but as fellow advice from a fellow author to another. Advice aside, this story was a breath of fresh air. I'd done some review swaps but I like your story the most so far. I'll put your story in my collection, not for the sake of it but because I'm already invested in where the author will take me. Kudos to you and keep up the great work! **: Haven't played Total War yet but because of your story, I might just give it a go :)

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Crown of a Thorn King

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Thank you for your kind words. I'm glad the subtext behind the two was picked up. Their relationship will be very important to the progression of the plot, but maybe in a way that might disappoint you. For the rest of the story, I'll be sticking to the past tense. In the first segment, I was trying to mix up my style of writing following the advice of some self-help books. Didn't work as I expected, but I was satisfied with it enough to keep it as is. Again, thank you very much for your kind words. If you ever pick up TW: Attila, just remember that any battle can be won, with enough cheese and savescum.