This story has a great amount of potential to become something great. No exaggerations are needed. The premise of the story is quite captivating, to say the least. Synopsis: It's a unique synopsis that I like. However, more could be added to it as it gave little to no information on what the story was about. It also had a few grammatical errors so would be good if you made some edits. Writing Quality: This is where your story falls short and the reason it didn't receive full marks from me. In not too sure if your first language is English so I didn't mark you too hard. However, your grammar needs some work. While it was not completely unreadable, I can tell you that many readers will become frustrated trying to read your story. I would recommend downloading Grammarly to help you with the issues you face. Story Development: Very nice. I liked how it dived right into an action scene from the get-go. Was quite captivating. Good job author. Character Design: You didn't say too much in regards to this. But that's down to your preference. Some readers like to imagine how the characters look for themselves instead of having them detailed by the author. So, it goes both ways. Overall, not a bad book. It has enormous potential to become something good. Just fix the grammar and you're good to do. Best of luck, author!
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