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2021-02-01 17:07

Hey hey! :D This is an interesting story! <3 Aight first, the writing is great, and I could picture the scenes in my head as I was reading it hehe! I would suggest breaking off the paragraphs more, though, so it would be easier and smoother for the readers hehe! I really love the characters, since each of them has their own unique traits, and the best thing issss their interactions were cuteee aaaa <3 Great work, author! <3

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Yes thank you! I've been working on the paragraphs and I'll keep improving! I'm glad you like my story and the characters!

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