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AstersforSeptemberLv33yr
2021-04-16 08:56

I guess its up for a good start. The characters a good and the development is okay. Maybe its just me but its just my opinion but maybe the personality of the mc is a bit... Well.. He contradicts himself a lot... And not like he has a trauma i guess... I understand the ml for acting that way cause he doesnt want to be a certain someone.. The roomate is a good addition and brings more color. I just hope it wouldnt go downhill or become stale. Good luck to our author-nim though and i wish the best~

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