Review Detail of DonDenis in LoanShark Devil Guy

Well, for what I can say, your plot is very good, although I'd say you should improve the writing, especially the use of punctuations inside your quotes - which were lacking at some points, all your discussions are meant to be quoted, but I guess you should improve that over time, and there were also places where paragraphs felt out of place. But like I said, those are improbable aspects of writing, so no problem or panic there, as far as you're consistent with the story. Just my honest review 😊 Good work author!