Review Detail of knight_faded in My Girlfriend Wants Me to Share My Harem?

Your world background still lacking, I advised you search a new reference from another novel, does not have to be same genre. Don't making story pace too straightforward, you have to describe protagonist point of view from his experiences in his past, hobbies or something and explain how he felt and his reaction from her sudden of change, you should take a note from other reference. Don't forget this element. Like,' I never see another girls smiles so brightly, I wanted her to smile forever' At least, you have a good sense of comedy. And I am pleased if you include some romantic comedy and cheating joke experience from another Japanese manga. Of course, you have to include a sentence like this. 'Feeling dandere maid's gaze at me, it gives me a chill.' Making the plot sound interesting, it will making people interested what is going on next. I enjoyed your novel, don't stop, will ya? I will give you bonus star if you follow my advise. Success for you,