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Arkaj_Bhagawati
Arkaj_BhagawatiLv13yr
2021-05-24 14:44

Hey Author awesome work here! I like the story very much and the world is also made very nicely. But there are some points I would like to share- - The change in MC's body made him very good at analyzing things. But when he encounters the odd changes in his body and the people following him, his mind goes blank. Like, he puts all the strange things happening to the back of his mind saying that he doesn't have much information. He should at least try and analyze what's happening and should come to some conclusions and theories as to what he might be and what's happening in his surroundings. - And in the story it feels like as if the MC is being dragged around by some strange fate into various troublesome issues without his control. I mean, till now it's fine since he doesn't have 'Magic Sense' so can't tell if anything troublesome is happening ahead. But sometimes it feels as if he is being forcefully dragged in these situations which he solves with his brute strength and doesn't try to understand what might've caused them and thus creating an uproar in the circle of the upper echelons of the world (They'll send their spies and assassins and track the moves of MC without him knowing and solves various problems easily causing them shock). And he also lets everybody follow him saying he felt flustered and didn't know what to say so let them follow him. Please don't make this into one of those novels where wherever the MC goes he gets into trouble without knowing. At least let him understand the trouble and let him decide whether to act on it. I mean let him have his own will when joining troublesome situations. Also let him understand his own strength and don't think that he is very weak and all just like those Japanese Novels (just my opinion). He shouldn't just get dragged into the his minions/side characters/FMC's troubles every time. Just don't make this into a cliché where MC solves every trouble unknowingly and saves the world. BTW if there's someone or something controlling his fate then it's OK. All in all these were just my opinions and the book till now was very AWESOME!! KEEP IT IP!! [img=recommend]

Supreme Monarch

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489 Chs

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AnimeTagzAuthor

Thanks for shari g your thoughts, will keep that in mind

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AnimeTagzAuthor

Author here. I hope this story is to your liking, and I apologise for the slow update. I just wanted to do longer chapters so it takes longer to write and edit... Would appreciate a vote or comment and any constructive criticism is welcomed. Suggestions are appreciated and may find their way into a side plot or storyline so please. Thanks

4yr

Easy_Tiger
Easy_TigerLv1

This is a work of real high quality. The chapters are long but cover a whole lot of ground and incorporate some excellent characters and world building. The pacing is spot on and grips the reader right from the opening chapter. Prose is colorful, original and flows really well. You can tell the work has undergone some edits as typos are almost non-existent and the sentences are structured really well. The story is still developing at the stage I am up to, but I am certainly hooked at this point and will continue with this one till the end. Top quality entertainment. A really solid novel!

4yr
Retr09007
Retr09007Lv1

I like the plot and characters a lot but the author has the habit of over-explaining everything. A lot of the chapters are just random explaining of things that really have nothing to do with the plot in any way. There is also the constant pov changes for seemingly no reason. Instead of developing the mc we are focusing on two side characters before we even know what is going on plot-wise. It's extremely frustrating.

3yr
Mel_Aniv
Mel_AnivLv4

With just the title, it seemed to have potential. Looking great with just the title and cover. The synopsis made me hooked instantly, it captivated my heart. Reading a few chapters, the flow was nice and not choppy to read. The author was talented so the novel was in good hands! Cheers!

4yr
Just_Jackul
Just_JackulLv13

I love the beginning of the story and cant wait to see how it progresses. But there were a few boring chapters and uninteresting fights. The mc lets people force themselves onto him, which I dislike( not demon lord behavior). Most of the subordinates either will desire revenge or help with their personnel problems dragging the mc into more troublesome situations. All I can foresee is the mc playing hero or recruiting more baggage. There are also times the mc seems stupid and takes unnecessary decisions/actions.

3yr
Anitrone
AnitroneLv3

Can't wait for more... Chapters are long and engaging, really love the direction the story is going. I'm guess the prelude happens sometime in the future so I really want to see how the mc builds up himself and gathers his generals.... This is fun and I hope many others give it a try so author can keep going 😊

4yr
Alex_Itsios
Alex_ItsiosLv1

That's a cool story with a cool cover and name. Looking forward to see how the story unravels! [img=recommend][img=recommend][img=recommend]

4yr
Trim
TrimLv11

Well.... I just decided to drop this here for no particular reason............ ......... ...... ........... ......... ....... ...... ...... ....... ...... .....

3yr
Thanox
ThanoxLv3

Still early on the story.... Just here to support author and I love the premise of the book... Longer chapters are a must for me... [img=update][img=update][img=update]

4yr
The_divine_oracle
The_divine_oracleLv11

Good plot. The opening premise is attention-grabbing. I like the way the characters are shaped. The story is well written, easy to understand, and really gets you involved. Keep up the good work.

4yr
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