Review Detail of DaoistyQNGiX in Arrakis is a Black half-breed.

So far this story has been a mess.... it needs an editor big time and that would increase the overall quality of the fic but adding cultivation type stuff for Harry Potter to me is just dumb idk how else to put it(guess im dumb lol) but yeah you have to read it to understand what I mean but so far it hasnt been worth the read.... could be much better if it had an editor