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Let me talk about the positive and negative side of this story, unlike other reviews that only complain about what they wanted to see while turning a blind eye to the positives My native language is not English, so forgive me for grammatical errors on the date of this review, I read up to chapter 23 which is the most recent, MC still in Kenichi worlds so I'll talk about it obs: warning of small spoilers starting with the positives ◘ No random cheats that break the rules of the world • if you expect the MC to make a wish to receive some "Devour" skill or "become stronger two hundred times faster than normal", then go read a xianxia, ​​but learn to read the tags first because the "OP" tag MC "is not there, the correct tags here would be" Weak to strong "and later on in case he takes the powers to other worlds" strong to stronger ", his gifts are well controlled and nothing absurd, it is mainly talent in certain areas that allow him to learn certain things quickly, again, is not exaggerated ◘ The author is good at the flow and development of the story • Development has the perfect pace, neither fast nor slow, time skip from months to years happen with a good frequency until reaching the canon, all of them show and describe the training and effort of the MC, there is little that I hate more in a story than a mega time skip and the MC becoming super OP as if it were the easiest thing in the world, I appreciate the effort of the MC(this is why I love second come of gluttony), and I agree with the author that a child reaching the level of a master does not make any sense, even the body would be an impediment ◘ Very detailed • The author details everything very well, from the techniques and thoughts of the characters to the movements that happen in combat, the personalities of the characters are also very well described, I really enjoyed the relationship between the MC and the taekwondo master in Korea, I think his name is Mingyu or something, even the farewell was fun, I hope he will pay a visit to Ryozanpaku later ◘ Background • the background story of the MC is him being the son of two of the strongest fighters in the world, although the father is almost always absent, the MC has a good base in martial arts and is taught by his mother, their relationship is very pleasant, the MC's mother is a character who has difficulty expressing emotions and thoughts, and expresses them mainly through orders, irony, and especially actions. his parents being who they are, makes him have a big target on his back due to the enemies of both, it only makes him train until a certain age, and after he travels the world to improve himself, it lasts a few chapters ◘ Within the realm of possibility • A questionable point that I see as positive but you can see it as negative, the MC does not have a strange plot armor along with luck that defies the heavens + a hogyoku in the ass fulfilling wishes subconsciously that allows him to reach extremely high levels in one short time spitting in the efforts of the masters, like Kenichi or Ichigo, in the case of Ichigo it is more or less understandable due to its 3 lineages, but Kenichi reaching the master level in one year is strange ◘ Different purpose • Unlike some authors who would definitely put the MC at the same age as Kenichi, Mio and Ryuto with one of the main reasons being stronger than Kenichi while showing off and taking Mio, the MC here is going towards becoming a master in Ryozanpaku and possibly the strongest after "The Invincible Superman", who knows how to overcome it, a different approach that is a breath of fresh air amid so many stories of MC's hunting asses. Now for the negative points ○ First time leaving home The first time the MC left the house he was accompanied by his mother, his mother had to leave to do something quickly and in the meantime the MC confirms to a totally suspicious guy that he is her son, he is stabbed without any resistance, faints for a while and then the story continues with his mother committing a mad slaughter against his enemies. the key point here is that it is very forced, the MC had trained and it is for the two strongest beings in the world can be said, and the fact that he got stabbed with absolutely no resistance was disappointing, I understand he dodges, blocks, running, and getting tired due to his underdeveloped body as a child, and later after trying so hard, being stabbed, but he just being stabbed out of nowhere was very annoying for me Low impact gifts ○ I don't want to see the Goddess's gifts being op, but I also don't want to see most of them being rarely used, "understanding" and "energy manipulation" should have allowed him to at least develop a legendary ki-based technique, he managed develop your own fighting style enjoyably and interestingly but ki techniques that should have been developed first due to the present ended up last in general it is a story with a lot of potential, the author made some small mistakes here and there but that can be ignored so as not to spoil the rest of the story, it is also important to have tolerance with the author and give constructive criticism because he is a newcomer classified as the "TYPE-SPONGE" class that improves and learns quickly, in addition to being polite in its responses and not excluding negative reviews, becoming an extinct species of authors on this cursed website that needs to be preserved at all costs I hope you enjoy reading as much as I do

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FluffiestEmperor
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Thank you so much for such a kind review. After some thought on Azuma's first time out of home, I realized I could have done a much better job in making the scene less forced, I will try to rewrite it later, but at the moment my priority is advancing the story. I'm glad you could overlook my mistake and continue reading and enjoying the story.

spectra_phantom
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