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2021-07-02 00:17

I don't care abt the hate comments. I know that you already founded your foundations so you can't make some major changes so the thing you can at least do is to improve. The first chapters have flaws, I can clearly see that the logic we think is different in here. However, despite of all that flaws, the story still managed to hook me up because of the FUN. A pure fun. You don't mind the errors, but just go with the flow. I know that people can't see the plot but at least there is FUN in there. People already forget what is fun and just focus on errors. We can clearly see that this is the root of author's improvement. Such flaws can't be fixed in the past so at least try to mold the future. Hope that the author can at least plan before write, that us at least the suggestion I can give.

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