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2021-01-28 15:20

Your grammar could use some work, nothing grammarly can't. Its very simple fixes. I like the story and the world building, very in-depth. I did get confused when she first talked to the white flame with other people around because I thought she was speaking aloud. Italics could fix that confusion. Overall, I really enjoyed it

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thank you for the honest review. n yeah, I have been editing my chapters lately. 🤭🤗

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