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Lord_GDK
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2021-01-15 21:57

please make it harem novel f 1

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LuminouShadow
LuminouShadowAuthor

Well please stay tuned and see what I have instore for everyone *wink wink*

Silent_Moon
Silent_MoonLv12

Hohoho~!

LuminouShadow:Well please stay tuned and see what I have instore for everyone *wink wink*
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LuminouShadow
LuminouShadowAuthor

Pheeeew! Shameless Author Review Timee~ Ik many of you were waiting <3. And I can't believe I wrote 15k words in 3 days... *cries in corner* But seriously, Writing this fanfic has been a thrill! And because it's a fanfic, I can interact with the readers more and have silly debates *giggle*. AnywhoooO~ What to expect from the story? The MC is a prince, he will stay a prince! He wont become a ninja! He wont put his ass in the battlefield! His ass belongs on top of a comfy chair or on top of the comfort of his minion. The MC has a ridiculous personality, but I think many of you, my friends. Will come to love him. Hating him is not an option! He can delete that! As for MC's woman(s) hmmm. That's a question I would not like to answer! xDDDD The MC in his first life was a clubber! That might tell you something. As for sleeping around... YES! HE will when he finally develops a drive. As for wives that's a story for another day. When someone among all the women in the world can finally pin him down he might consider settling.... or when his mommy forces him.. WE DONT KNOW! (this is not canon yet so don't worry too much). The MC is already OP, but he can only be considered OP if you don't kill him in an instant. In a group fight, any random shuriken can kill him, sigh! But that will change! As for the comedy! It's subjective. Many of you will like the writing style and flow of words. Other might cringe!! *ew* Anyway, hope you all enjoy my story. As I can say, I enjoy writing it! Have a nice day. Love ya all <3

WiLeYBiGhEaD
WiLeYBiGhEaDLv13

Some may like this novel and its style of writing but it is not for me and I was expecting better given a 4.8 rating(chapter 60). The writing and grammar is above average for this site, but the pacing of the novel and the excessive amount of internal narration have caused me to loose interest. Internal narration is not uncommon in novels and can even dominate the story depending on the style/genre. But here it is excessive to the point that every chapter is filled with the mc's internal reasonings, justifications, and excessive number of complaints. Even sections that should be primarily dialogue are constantly interrupted by internal narration. The most recent chapter had the mc + his subordiantes/allies run into several villain's including Orochimaru and nothing happens.. Nothing except the entire chapter the mc is complaining about his plans being ruined and thinking about what to do through internal narration. This is an important moment where characters exchange dialogue, argue, fight with each other, etc. but none of that happens. It ruins the flow of the story, making short events take forever to read and leading to conversations only containing a few lines of dialogue. I find myself skipping through the mc's whining and childish thought processes to get to something actually important happening and find that the chapter is already finished. Which brings me to the childish mc. He is super childish even as a reincarnated adult individual and it seems to be getting worse in recent chapters. This is more of a personal preference but I cringe when reading the large number of sound effects added to the internal narration sections and the current mc feels like he is regressing. Overall, its above average for a fanfic on this site. The grammar is fairly well done with very few errors and the story is unique (which is not easy in the naruto fanfic genre). However, it is dragged down by the dialogue being small and interrupted by every characters internal thoughts, combined with a childish/whiny mc. Try is and you may like it, but don't get your hopes up seeing a 4.8 rating.

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