Review Detail of MultiGunner in Killing Kei: Dark Helmets in a Light Room
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This is a beautiful one-shot with engaging dialogue that can set the scene and atmosphere on its own. The worldbuilding is intricate and see** through naturally through the character interactions with one another and the built environment. I will be patiently waiting for future stories set in this world. I found it most interesting that you chose to include the narrator as a character in that way. It made him appear as if speaking directly to us and the character at the end. However, I found it somewhat confusing at times in the narration. But is likely due to limitations of inkstone. I hope you continue to experiment with this technique in the future.
Killing Kei: Dark Helmets in a Light Room
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Thank you for the kind words. It really means a lot. I was working on the third one-shot but it'll be slower than usual because I'm working on a entirely new novel for the current contest. Hopefully, I can manage so I can finally write the main story. To be honest, I was anxious to see how readers would receive this style of narration. I really appreciate your constructive thoughts about it and I hope I can lessen the confusion in the future. I wish italics were available to us authors. Thoughts would be more obvious and other writing forms could be applied. Thank you again and I wish you the best in your novel as well! (am excited for chapter 4 lol)