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Wolfgirl1215
Wolfgirl1215Lv24yr
2021-02-28 18:14

Okay, here is my review! Something I think this novel does really well that a lot of others don't is really make you feel. Whether that be by the actions of the characters, or the detailed imagery, it is one of the more emotive novels I have seen for a while, and I think that may be due to its realism. Its a pleasure to read something so grounded and something that feels like the author has put a lot of time and effort into crafting. I love the dynamics of the characters, each one was unique and developed well. I think in order for me to give it a full 5 stars I would like to see a bit more variation in sentence length and a few grammar corrections just so the story flows nicer. There were also a few times things felt like they should be more dramatic, such as Christy's breakup, but because I didn't know much about the character or their history, it didn't have the effect I was looking for. Overall however, a very nice read. Great work!

Corazón

Tokio999
4.8
186 Chs

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Tokio999
Tokio999Author

Thanks for your support, love it<3 stay tuned if you wanted to know about their breakup, i wanted to makes sure everything goes slowly. <3

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Wolfgirl1215
Wolfgirl1215Lv2

Of course! I appreciate that is the case. A lot of writers move along far to quickly. I think you have done very well with yours

Tokio999:Thanks for your support, love it<3 stay tuned if you wanted to know about their breakup, i wanted to makes sure everything goes slowly. <3
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Tokio999
Tokio999Author

Thankss a lot, I'll waiting for your story too <3

Wolfgirl1215:Of course! I appreciate that is the case. A lot of writers move along far to quickly. I think you have done very well with yours
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