I loved reading the first chapter, it's captivating enough inorder for me to want to continue reading. I'll advise you to get an editor, because there is a lot of grammatical errors, such as spelling (mainly using of the wrong homophone), punctuation errors, etc. Nonetheless the story is enjoyable and you have some really interesting characters going for you.
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