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Review Detail of Mepha in My Hormonal Control Quirk

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Mepha
MephaLv13yrMepha

Great fan fiction, where the author really worked on it and it is clearly visible. Ranging from a narrative style where there is no meaningless chatter, to sprawling chapters. The author writes very well, adding interesting facts and information about the main character, the story and the world and all that is between dialogues and mental monologo MC. I am surprised and very happy to see this style of storytelling on Webnovel, especially in erotic fan fiction. For this, you have earned my sincere respect. The characters are their behavior and motivations. So far, this is the best performance I've seen among the MHA fanfics. The characters really feel like they're alive, not just cardboard boxes. A lot of facts about the characters, mentions casually, or as if by accident, in the dialogues and so on. That for the reader it is a pleasure to read because your brain starts to work and you realize that this small fact, it matters. Although, to understand such things, you need to be familiar with the original. It's very cool when the author throws crumbs of information into your head, so that your brain works and gets to the truth said behind these crumbs. Of course, this is not a super cool, psychological trick, or the author is a genius with a +999 IQ. This is a popular style of writing, but for 2 months of active reading in Webnovel, I managed to forget, become stupid, and when the author gave food for thought, I seemed to wake up). I admit it sounds unconvincing and banal, but I'm glad that finally, at least someone, does not chew to us, readers. from A to Z. Just respect! A serious approach to the Main Character, his origin, quirk, motivation, goals and the universe of the main character. It's very cool written that I can only praise you for it. Usually in Webnovel, these things are explained in the author's notes, because often these authors simply do not know how to describe the experience, character and development of the actual persons in the book Competent and well-written erotica. From all that I read in Webnovel (I like to repeat myself.) This fan fiction is the closest to the spirit of the job's Cambrian. And if you know who this type is, then you understand that everything is fine with lemon and even more. BIIIIG chapters! Very large chapters for webnovels (Did I tell you that I like to repeat myself?!) this is just crazy! Author, are you a person at all? So many symbols, yet written with high quality?! And all this for free??? *Stood up and began to applaud.* May God bless you author, may God bless you! I just can't find the words, I sincerely thank you. In conclusion, I would like to give you some advice. First, you need to adjust, or even change the description. After reading it, I thought that this is another shit-fanfic and forgot about it. You need to emphasize that this is not stupid garbage fan fiction, but something more serious. Secondly, please do not compete with GhostyZ, you just destroyed it! It is he who should be equal to you, his work looks like a child's doodle in comparison with your fanfiction. I'm not kidding, he just doesn't deserve to be considered a competitor by an author like you. I got acquainted with the work of this GhostyZ and I can honestly say that he is the worst author I have ever seen in 7 years as a reader. Believe me author, from his hands will come out the maximum a weak and mediocre book. Don't humiliate yourself by comparing yourself to this "GhostyGiveMeaStones". Well-deserved 5 stars!

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My Hormonal Control Quirk

Shinoerah

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Shinoerah
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Well, if I don't respond to this kind of review, I'm indeed not a person xD That's the most detailed review I ever have till I started writing 4 years ago (even if I started writing in french). I'm glad the work I put in this fan-fic is so much appreciated; this is like 8 hours of writing (beta-reading, correction, small reword) on a daily basis; since English isn't my first language, it can even take longer, so thank you for the kind words. And yes, I always try to make the characters seem as alive as possible since they are the ones who give life to the plot, so I make sure that they have language tics and that they say things that aren't out of character... paying close attention to what they say is at least a bit important. It's not always easy to do 😅 For the MC, I wanted him to have a goal initially; I assume that sex scenes shouldn't be the "reward" for him, but part of the story that leads and helps him claim the "reward," so his goal, etc. For example, the reward can also be a woman or money, but I try to fuel the MC with different energies to make him slightly different from the well-known Mary Sue cringe-ass dark lord MC. For the advice, 🤔 I can change the synopsis. Still, since the story is R-18 oriented both for sex scenes and slightly gore content (in the future), I think it's pretty accurate 🤔 I will change this during the day and see how to articulate it to make the synopsis more "mature.". As a fellow "author" like him, I also will not talk about the GhostyZ part but thank you xD

Xersol
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Man went full on simping mode to the author, and to be honest would’ve also.