A charming work with a promising premise and characters that come together to form an overall entertaining story. While I must confess that I did not, at first, find myself very sympathetic to the protagonist, she grew on me as the story unfolded. The writing is very clear and clean, making it an easy, relaxing read.
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LIKENot really. My personal preference is a little more descriptive, but I think the current rhythm suits your story very well, so I wouldn’t throw it around too much. There’s a certain charm in the easy and clear style you deploy, and I don’t know whether you would do your story any favours where you to start using overly floral descritions.