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Review as of chapter 28: Story : Not much to tell since it's a ffn though I have to say the author has a clear picture of where he wants to take the story and I am just beginning to like the changes the author is doing to the original one. Characters: Well the mc until this point is very much a Mary stu although I do like the oc female . All other characters seem to be on point according to the original but I do hope the author explores the background of few characters like Rachel and the guy who was supposed kim suho's rival (sorry bad with names) who were completely sidelined in the original story. Writing quality: Decent I would say. Spelling errors and grammar problems here and there but definitely won't be a problem for reading. Good start to a story .Just hoping for less of a Mary stu mc who shows some flaws and actually depends on someone (hajin/oc) as the story progresses. Also the mc is way too much of a prick right now hope author has some very good explanation for this in the name of character development. Also personal request please tone down the amount of swearing. I don't think anyone swears this much in an academic setting because it just breaks the immersion. All in all a good story which has all the potential to be a great one if you look past some of mc quirks. I have seen many ffn of this particular novel on this site taken down after a few chapters due to writer blocks. I hope the author won't drop this anytime soon.
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I have all the time in the world to wait. I will be coming back regularly to check up on new chapters. Good luck in the future
dvelasquez:That he will, he'll slowly find something to put efforts in, and the novel will go in a different direction than the original, that's something I'm building since early chapters. What I'm kind of sorry about it, that I'll take my time with it, so don't expect anything less than 400 chapters of this novel xD
Thanks for reading, man! And for the review. There are a few things I'm getting a bit better on future chapters, like the swearing, which has stopped, and though it's still a quirk of his personality, it has toned down on the writing. I'm adding more protagonism to some characters like Rachel, who, as you said, was left aside after the middle of the story. And about the MC being a Gary Stu, he's overpowered yes, but that basically comes from not being the first adventure he goes through. Still, I'm not saying that's not a flaw, as it was completely intended to be like that from the start, so it's totally my bad with not starting with an adventure from before he gets that amount of power. Thanks for reading, for the review, and more importantly, thanks for the feedback! I'll try to get better in points I'm failing, hope you keep reading!
I have no problems with op main characters man. I actually like them (tatsuya shiba, ayanokouji kiyotoka , yagami, L, lelouch ) are few of my favorites. All these characters were op yes but they had conviction and they had to actually fight against the system which they were placed in. That's what actually made them interesting for me. Your mc until now doesn't know what he wants to do there and he's so op that it removes the dark feeling and seriousness of the novel. I am hoping that the mc finds something worth to do there or find out that the story goes in different direction than in the original to bring back element of suspense.
dvelasquez:Thanks for reading, man! And for the review. There are a few things I'm getting a bit better on future chapters, like the swearing, which has stopped, and though it's still a quirk of his personality, it has toned down on the writing. I'm adding more protagonism to some characters like Rachel, who, as you said, was left aside after the middle of the story. And about the MC being a Gary Stu, he's overpowered yes, but that basically comes from not being the first adventure he goes through. Still, I'm not saying that's not a flaw, as it was completely intended to be like that from the start, so it's totally my bad with not starting with an adventure from before he gets that amount of power. Thanks for reading, for the review, and more importantly, thanks for the feedback! I'll try to get better in points I'm failing, hope you keep reading!
That he will, he'll slowly find something to put efforts in, and the novel will go in a different direction than the original, that's something I'm building since early chapters. What I'm kind of sorry about it, that I'll take my time with it, so don't expect anything less than 400 chapters of this novel xD
vijaybmohan:I have no problems with op main characters man. I actually like them (tatsuya shiba, ayanokouji kiyotoka , yagami, L, lelouch ) are few of my favorites. All these characters were op yes but they had conviction and they had to actually fight against the system which they were placed in. That's what actually made them interesting for me. Your mc until now doesn't know what he wants to do there and he's so op that it removes the dark feeling and seriousness of the novel. I am hoping that the mc finds something worth to do there or find out that the story goes in different direction than in the original to bring back element of suspense.
Thanks, man! You too. Good luck with whatever you propose to do! And have fun with it. Hope to read from you soon!
vijaybmohan:I have all the time in the world to wait. I will be coming back regularly to check up on new chapters. Good luck in the future