Review Detail of LeoAsimp_co in I Will Not Become Your Slave!!

Item: I Will Not Become Your Slave!!
Rating: 3.6

Review detail

LeoAsimp_coLv13yrLeoAsimp_co

The story so far is intresring i get the rivalry thing its very rated R which im bot complaining about. Try to make Your sentences Flow more, be discriptive of your mc’s thoughts almost like your in their shoes(if that makes sense) Keep it up its really good also love the cover btw. -dede

I Will Not Become Your Slave!!

Carciphones_02

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Carciphones_02AuthorCarciphones_02

well, about the flow of the story.. first person of view is really hard. I'm too lazy lol!! ᕙ( : ˘ ∧ ˘ : )ᕗ

3yr

LeoAsimp_coLv1LeoAsimp_co

THats understanable when you get to flow of things youll get it, When you get the chance lol.

Carciphones_02:well, about the flow of the story.. first person of view is really hard. I'm too lazy lol!! ᕙ( : ˘ ∧ ˘ : )ᕗ

3yr

Carciphones_02AuthorCarciphones_02

thanks for the review!! I'll keeo it in mind

LeoAsimp_co:THats understanable when you get to flow of things youll get it, When you get the chance lol.

3yr

LeoAsimp_coLv1LeoAsimp_co

No problem, i do hope you get the chance to review mines

Carciphones_02:thanks for the review!! I'll keeo it in mind

3yr

Carciphones_02AuthorCarciphones_02

of course!!! already in my to do list!!

LeoAsimp_co:No problem, i do hope you get the chance to review mines

3yr