Review Detail of _r34der_ in The Bloodline System

Overall, its a great story. I like the context and at the start the MC is really fleshed out. A bullied coward who's weak and, although he doesn't have the lingering attachments that I'd like to see, he's a good character nonetheless. However, as you go further on in the story, Gustav changes and becomes like almost every other MC. I don't really enjoy the change since I'd rather see him be as cynical as he used to be a person with trust issues and things like that. Its also easy to notice that the Author is losing his ideas and stretching the story out too far. The quality is fine, but everything is becoming 2D. The Author revealed the answers instead of slowly showing it bit by bit and Gustav is becoming naive. With Miss Aimee, you can tell the Author wanted to stop the clichee of some old geezer being super powerful and teaching the MC so they made the 'old geezer' a young woman. More evidence is shown when the Author does a vote asking whether Gustav should abandon Angy by "impregnating Miss Aimee". Also, rather than continuing the story slowly, its better to speed it up slightly. Ignoring the last sentence though, Endric. He's a cocky brat who can't handle the idea of Gustav being stronger than him and I liked that! It gave him the potential to either be the best antagonist or to have a really good redemption arc. Then he goes and gets beaten up by a teacher and then he suddenly likes Gustav? And now he acts like a robotic, pious believer of Gustav? Unbelievable. I would've liked seeing him be broken down bit by bit by either different people he knew or people he cared for. Then I'd like seeing him understand everything from Gustav's pov. He became really shallow and I don't like that potential being wasted like this. A similar example to how this could've been better is this, a book I love, Level Up Legacy. Oren and Arthur share a similar relationship but it only serves to show how irreversible their relationship is as Arthur took the mantle of being the 'father'. And it even deepens it by some statements that Arthur said, he said that he didn't like being near worshipped by Oren and therefore, he made Oren leave. I want to see something similar where Endric will disagree with Gustav or where they need to separate for some reason. Sorry for the paragraph!