Review Detail of PoeticSonic in The Bloodline System

Wow this is a low rating and I won't lie, it kinds of makes me feel weird but you did raise some valid points. The whole Crimson Lord thingy was not well thought out I admit. As for the character design... I mentioned it earlier that Gustav is a shame to mixedblood. He doesn't get bullied by normal people only by mixed bloods. About him being smart, I also mentioned that he was smart in studies or better still intelligent but when it comes to real life situations he's not smart. I won't explain why the system is like that because it would be a spoiler. As for the plot which you say is forced... I would like for you to elaborate. I would also like to know if you're still gonna continue reading because I can assure you that there will be improvement.

first of all, i want to make something clear, i did the review for a specific reason and it isn't to bash you. it's good that you're very invested in people's views as i would like to clarify a few things, i wrote the review as i was thinking about each point so it wasn't too coherent. about the system, look buddy I completely understand, you don't even need to justify why it acts that way although I know it's a valid reason, even if there wasn't it's just creative freedom some might like it and some might don't so don't worry about it. I pointed out the way the system behaved because it compounded all the things that are happening around him, it like kicking somebody who's already down. as for the treatment by mixed-bloods, I think in my review I said something about how it wasn't enough of a reason for them to do what they did to him on that level and how people of authority care little about the attempted murder that keeps happening to him on a semi-regular base. look i get it, they "bully" (which is a vast understatement to what was done to him) because he has a "trash" ability, as a person with 2.5 brain cells remaining active can still see the larger ramifications of what they are doing that just gets dismissed. brother, in the story it says that it has been thousands of years, even if it was only a few 100, you are telling me that somehow he with mixed blood even if it was the most useless is treated that way, yet a human or an alien gets treated better even though they are powerless? on the other point of view, do you not think that the humans and the aliens should be shitting their pants right now, looking at how they treat their own kind and calling him useless and how they totally disregard his well being, if that happens to one of their own then how worse would they be treated if mixed-bloods chose to suddenly treat the humans and aliens in the same way. if you showed even a slight bit of a reaction from the humans and aliens who have no power and hint about the fear they feel inside about how one day they will be treated in the same way then not only will it make your novel's world-building richer BUT you can have more content to write about maybe how humans and aliens are trying to preserve themselves in these changing and cold times. you already hinted about shady things happening in the background like mixblood organ trafficking so the seeds are already there, the world-building is the rich soil and your writing is the process that will grow the plant, the better the soil and the more quality seeds there are, the more quality healthy plants you're gonna get(content). i will give you s viewpoint of an arrogant mixed-blood... if a trash mixed blood is shameful then how shameful would it be if it was found out that mixed-bloods originated from week and helpless humans and aliens that ran away thousands of years ago with their tail between their legs. wouldn't they want to hide that truth? as for the whole crimson lord issue at the start, as i said before, it was a small glimpse and we didn't get much from the future MC which is a GOOD thing as now, you can build on the character and show the same scene in the start of the novel but with a whole new point of view which can be funny or point out how the MC actually feels. very few titles stick and sound cool rather than cringy and most of those titles don't have something like "lord, prince, etc" it can be something somewhat mediocre or something that isn't grand in normal life but when you apply it to the person with the title, knowing the reason behind the name, that makes it cool...case in point Korean zombie, he's a ufc fighter for korea, if you call somebody a zombie in real life, they would take it as an insult but it's cool on Korean zombie because he's a beast who has one of the strongest chins in the Ufc taking punches, kicks, and elbow...(well maybe not elbow lmao) and he keeps fighting.

a few fighters got a title like emperor but they never called them if just the title, for example, Fedor Emelianenko was called the last emperor. he got it for many reasons and not his legendary fighting career but also how he did it and even he was never just called by his title they always said his name and then the title in passing later on so when they chanted, they chanted his name not the title unless it's in special cases so they can point out how amazing he was. also, another way to make a character/ fighter look cool is by attaching a slogan to their name. for example, another fighter called cro cop had a slogan that people wanted to point out how amazing he was, his slogan that PEOPLE gave him is " right leg hospital, left leg cemetery" because he had phenomenal kicks and his lead kick was his left leg. another fighter called Kazushi Sakuraba was given the title "the gacie hunter" and other even call him "the Gracie killer" because he defeated a member of the family who MADE jiu-jitsu which at the time was undefeated and then they sent out more family members to defeat him yet he won over all of them and at many times, it was under their own rules. the history for those people to get the title which makes the titles cool not the other way around. i know you can do it. you have rock-solid foundations and creativity. i already put the story in my library. i was mostly frustrated because i like the concept and the writing of the story

Wow this is a lot. Thank you for reading and pointing out these things. I will make sure to improve the story to the best of my abilities. Thanks once again

That is the longest webnovel review I have ever seen

the excessive bullying of protagonists to draw sympathy from readers is cringe it is irrational how every character just accepts it as normal

This is one of the most detailed review I've read, thanks man