Review Detail of Staria_ in The Tale of the Void Emperor

Where do I start? Good story good Idea but poor execution. I feel like there was soooo much more you could have done in the first volume and introduction of the first female lead was waaay to early (but it doesn't matter you have your creators freedom). I feel it slowed down the story a lot and made the ML Less goal oriented than he should be. Now it feels the MC doesn't have a mind of his own and goes with the flow because his character build is poor. It's like 100 chapters in and not knowing what the MC is for and against except his girlfriend sorry wife. My advice is don't rush and add depth to each detail introduced to the story. The lack of depth is causing a shallow pull on the reader it's not just about 'wait more and interestingthings will happen'. The language has improved from how it was in the beginning so keep it up. My other problems with the existence of the female lead is that how they met was poorly developed and I cringed at some parts and because you are new to writing, in depth characterisation is already bad for the main character now you have two and your not handling it properly. I honestly feel you should drop her and say she was picked up by an elder for training or something like that and separate them for years so you can properly develop the MC and her rise in power can be accepted by the readers without you having to slow the mc's progress just so she can keep up. Uour creation of that female lead was self sabotage because as of present the story would be 100x better without her because the mc would well develop within having to worry about some other person.. But it's an okay read. You are really trying and I wish you best of luck.