Review Detail of Luke_Mindwrath in The Fifth Victim

The writing quality is a mess, there are so many misused dialogue and action tags. Even the use of the punctuation was either hit or miss. A lot of ellipses used as something that act as quiver of the voice but its becoming too frequent, even outside of the dialogue that its like a pet peeve. I hope the author would improve on this. The updates might not be daily but its coping up weekly. Kudos. Story development: its too early and feel a little convuluted; I'm not sure how this would turn out with quite a premise. I can't say much with character designs, there are a lot of chars introduced in first couple chapters but yet to flesh out, like it was made there as "AHH! A victim died, okay thank you next. " Like it was for namesakes. worldbackground: same issue; then again, it's too early to tell, but this is how I rate and its still subjected to change