While I did like the Book to a certain extent, it isn't amazing or fantastic or outstanding in any way or form and all the other 5-Star reviews don't know shit, typical Chinese if you ask me. Don't get me wrong, it isn't that bad, but the author made a really bad job with Original characters and I can't in any shape or form understand how the author can portray such amazing Characters in such a bad way! I would understand people changing characters so that they fit their world/Nobel but the author 'said' that he follows canon so the CH isn't changed. The Grammar is decent, and that's all I have to say. If the author wants to know how many stars I gave him in each category, then comment, because I am too lazy at the moment.
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Thanks for the honest review! - As I will state again and again this is my first novel (see my own review) so I have found issues when adding in characters and giving them a personality, something im hoping on improving in time over the novels lifespan. As for following the original canon I did state at first that I wouldn't change it but now its becoming more likely in my head that certain scenes need to change for connections to happen. Ideas change all the time and at first when I first conceptualised this novel I wanted my mc to have his own story running parallel with only minimal interaction, but as im progressing I feel that would be stale and boring. - Again I do appreciate the honest review and hopefully will improve in the future, thanks for giving my novel a chance and I hope you find good novels to read in the future :).
no problem, as I said, it isn't all that bad but there are things, chapter 5, for example, that are forced and unnecessary. Why would he need books in advance so much if the canon starts only 2 years after he joined Hogwarts? Together with his knowledge and wishes, it would be really easy to gain power fast! And The real problems, when Voldemort rises again only come when he is nearly finished with school, and at this point, he would hold a lot of power. And not only is this scene unnecessary but so forced and unnatural that it's a bit cringe, a lot actually! So, yeah...these are things that would have been good to change, but that's impossible now. Maybe when you rewrite the story but I doubt you will.
BoiGeorge:Thanks for the honest review! - As I will state again and again this is my first novel (see my own review) so I have found issues when adding in characters and giving them a personality, something im hoping on improving in time over the novels lifespan. As for following the original canon I did state at first that I wouldn't change it but now its becoming more likely in my head that certain scenes need to change for connections to happen. Ideas change all the time and at first when I first conceptualised this novel I wanted my mc to have his own story running parallel with only minimal interaction, but as im progressing I feel that would be stale and boring. - Again I do appreciate the honest review and hopefully will improve in the future, thanks for giving my novel a chance and I hope you find good novels to read in the future :).
Well for the chapter 5 thing of Oz procuring books, I wrote that purely as I wanted him to gain some kind of knowledge of magic before school. In hindsight maybe I should have just left him in the Orphanage until Mcgonagall came to pick him up but I wanted there to be some kind of plot going on. As for Voldemort, I don't really want to talk much about what I have planned for that part of the story. Oz will be helping out taking him down for sure but slowly and surely in the next years at Hogwarts I want to reveal something greater than one dark wizard that plagues the British wizarding community, something that expands the story to a worldwide crisis. - Maybe later down the line I'll take all these considerations to heart and do a remake of the story but when I've improved. As for now this is just me learning as I go, thanks for the honest comments :).
Jasonenrick:no problem, as I said, it isn't all that bad but there are things, chapter 5, for example, that are forced and unnecessary. Why would he need books in advance so much if the canon starts only 2 years after he joined Hogwarts? Together with his knowledge and wishes, it would be really easy to gain power fast! And The real problems, when Voldemort rises again only come when he is nearly finished with school, and at this point, he would hold a lot of power. And not only is this scene unnecessary but so forced and unnatural that it's a bit cringe, a lot actually! So, yeah...these are things that would have been good to change, but that's impossible now. Maybe when you rewrite the story but I doubt you will.
