I really Like the plot and but can you make him a little bit more like issei in wish of the dragons character just a tiny bit then it would be perfect but development first (aloof character)
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LIKEive never read wish of the dragon so dont really know how that character acts. you say aloof character. umm, i dont know if it will really fit. he isnt really an aloof person, that would just cause him problems with being too aloof and like being retarded like young masters. if your meaning a bit more like showy then he will slowly become a bit more like "damn filth" to young masters and stuff. but end of the day he is a regular person like us so suddenly becoming arrogant or aloof isnt really something he would develop. Other suggestions are welcome as well