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ssfx3yuchens
ssfx3yuchensLv104yr
2021-01-04 20:45

This is a honest review by SSFX3YUCHENS, with a message to the author. Firstly, the story is relaxing and easy to read. On the other hand, I noticed a few grammatical errors. I wish to inform the author that I see a lot of potential in your story nevertheless. I understand as a fellow writer, we are all prone to grammar and vocabulary errors; I myself am no exception. My suggestion is moving forward, it would be most beneficial if you could identify such errors and correct them as you go along. I will provide you further info in DM. I hope these suggestions are helpful to you in your writing journey as I tend to make such mistakes myself and would like to share more with you. I like the idea behind the story and am a great isekai fan myself. I have also added the story to my library and will read it when I have time. All the best, SSFX3YUCHENS.

A DESIGNED LOVE

SHIVANYA
4.5
35 Chs

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Dreamy_star
Dreamy_starLv1

thank you so much... I will follow 😊✌️🙌

4yr
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Blessing_Ewetumo
Blessing_EwetumoLv3

A phenomenon read. Though there are a few typos that can be corrected, the story is still amazing none the less. Can't stop reading and I'll love to know more about the story.

3yr

Miyana_Miyana
Miyana_MiyanaLv3

The story is good and interesting❤️ It would have been better if you avoid long paragraphs and start some sentences with capitals. I like the protagonist. Keep fighting 👍👍

3yr
_Jaeee
_JaeeeLv2

The story was very interesting, I love the concept. A little work and polish from here and there would give it a big transformation. I'm sure the Author can find a way to make the story more interesting. But overall, It was a good story! I'm rooting for you, Author! Keep it up!

3yr
L_StellaLuna
L_StellaLunaLv2

The story is unique and interesting. A little typo changes would definitely a masterpiece! It's worth the read! It brings excitement in my creative mind. Great job to the author ! 👏👏👏

3yr
Mildred_Kumah
Mildred_KumahLv10

I found this book interesting. It has a lot of potential. It needs a little work but that doesn't take away from the fact that there is a great storyline going on here.

4yr
Dhanusia_dharani
Dhanusia_dharaniLv1

Fascinating fantasy.... really good . love it [img=coins][img=coins][img=coins][img=coins][img=coins][img=coins][img=coins][img=coins][img=coins][img=coins]

4yr
Vishal_Ashok
Vishal_AshokLv1

Amazing story. liked the way you narrated and I will add your book in library. Continue writing your book... I will be waiting for next chapter.

4yr
SweetMisery1996
SweetMisery1996Lv10

I should take lessons from you on your synopsis, its so amazing and I enjoy reading, can't wait to read more of your story. Keep up the great work! Definitely adding this to my library so I can keep up with your progression of the book!

4yr
tarastone_
tarastone_Lv1

spotted a few grammar mistakes ... keep up the good work... the characters are amazing ... the story is a less taken road... cant wait for more!

4yr
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