Review Detail of val_the_mysterious in Demoniac

Love the story concept. I'm a sucker for stories about demons and revenge and this one covers them both. One of the top fixes is definitely breaking up the paragraphs/formatting. There were several spots where they were talking back and forth and it was in one paragraph. Some kind of transition would be helpful when switching from one character to another. That being said, once I started reading I found I couldn't stop. The story and plot progression was immersive even with all the formatting and grammar issues. Keep up the good work!