I believe this story would have been better if the grammar and tenses were fixed. It feels like the story was written by a 10 year old. If it was...well, I guess I can't say much. Story development is excellent, I enjoyed it very much. Again, only problem is the grammar and tenses. Out of all, good job.
Alex_Destro
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