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Tibbles
TibblesLv153yr
2021-07-24 03:25

The synopsis of the story looked great; I liked the title; All in all it seemed like a book I would really enjoy. Then I tried reading the first chapter and the grammer kciked me so hard in the face my teeth were all knocked out. I will be more than happy to change my review if the Grammer improves to a basic level of English.

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Raw... The best I can say about this novel is this. The story development is not bad but the main idea from reading this novel is already lost in around 100 chapters. The MC hidden strength is no longer hidden and he no longer pursues a peaceful life, he just becomes a battle freak who can not control his emotions even when he is a control freak. The FL... what I can say? an old man was attracted to 12 years old girl suddenly when he was ignoring her for 4 years, the FL herself is not a special character and the interaction between them is forced before they start dating and became overly close when they just start dating. other significant characters, the roomates of his has barely any exposure until they become 14 years old and his mother and aunt who should be strong don't have enough exposure while his father and the king is always been on the screen, his teacher who should be an important character don't appear after he joined the school and his brothers have no big role in his life, we don't even know why his big brother disdain him. again the "hidden" part of the story, when he should just enjoy his life, is a lie, almost all the strong characters that were introduced in the story already know about his hidden strength and this make the essence of the story lost, you will also find few plot lines that help in building the world but it always feels fragile and need more support and thinking. There are many good things about this novel because the author is talented but the MC is just giving me a very bad impression that makes me unable to think about the good things. Finally, when I said this novel is raw I meant it literally, the novel feels like a great idea that needs many improvements, editing and polishing. a remake for it will be a hundred times better than what we have now.

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