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Sillyco
SillycoLv33yr
2021-07-02 22:18

So... this will be my second review... I had to make one because grammar and everything overall improved during these past few chapters. I just finished reading the latest chapter and I can't believe this is the same author with 1-3 grammar mistakes per every other paragraph! Currently, I'm not great enough to see some big grammar mistakes from the chapters. It's also very commendable that our mc grows not only through power but also personality wise and emotionally. The world is now bigger and more dangerous than I initially thought! The characters are great, not stiff but not overshadowing the mc. Updating wise, ooh lala, still stable. Overall, I will rate everything 5 stars :> I hope more people will take interest in this and continue on reading despite the awful writing from the early chapters because I assure you that it's all worth it and that it gets better. Lave ya author, decided to give this at least 1 power stone every day :)

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