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CodezL
CodezLLv43yr
2021-01-06 00:47

The grammar is good, it is not perfect but it is not bad either, the problem with the story is the MC, it seems that he thinks with his toes, whenever he has to choose something he makes an effort to choose the worst possible option, for example when he transmigrates he can choose the timeline, but he chooses to transmigrate only 3 years before luffy begins his journey, and above being 16 years old, completely wasting his desire that makes his training 10x more effective, the mc is too silly, And above it seems that at the rate the thing is going the mc is going to be a giant like whitebeard, although many say that in one piece it is normal I do not like it, zoro and sanji are in 180 cm and they are fine, it is not necessary to do it a giant monster.

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Kokushibou
KokushibouLv4

I agree, why would you want to be giant? May sound good, but it suck's.

Overkill
OverkillLv14

and ugly as fk!

Kokushibou:I agree, why would you want to be giant? May sound good, but it suck's.
Livergut
LivergutLv5

Overkill:and ugly as fk!
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Infamous_Fitz
Infamous_FitzLv2

Especially in a world like one piece with characters like law and zoro who are fast enough to cut you before you're able to attack them

Kokushibou:I agree, why would you want to be giant? May sound good, but it suck's.
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