It's a good start. The main character has been designed well, and the backstory of the world is great. The only thing you really need to work on is your spelling, grammar and punctuation. This brings down the quality of the writing a little bit. If you could find an editor to flesh out those spelling, grammar and punctuation errors, your story would become a much easier read.
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