Review Detail of LordSputnik in Sileo (Restart)
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The Good: Writing quality is great, the characters are all very well executed. The world the author is trying to create is fairly immersive and the way the author builds it really draws one in. I also enjoy longer chapters. The Bad: Paragraph structure is a bit thick making it difficult to read. Using a bunch of words from other languages and keeping their meanings is overkill. Nobody needs a footnote that's almost as long as a chapter to explain the meaning of words. The story is very interesting, but it's hard to find unless you force yourself to slow down and read into it some. The Neutral: Has plenty of potential! I personally feel like the powers are very unbalanced and not in the traditional "Overpowered MC" kind of way. That's just my thoughts though, don't take it to heart. Regardless, great work and hope you keep it up.
Sileo (Restart)
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Thanks, I'll cut the paragraphs (I noticed it too when I went back and read it on my phone O.ooooooo srry, it must've been pretty hard like that). I'll make an auxiliary volume for the (what should they be called?) things in different languages and just move them over. Thanks for telling me. I'll try to make the skills based off of english thingys, so like... ummmmm in French Organizer is to organize... I guess. AND I'll cut the footnote (o.o), I was sorta worried about it and then decided to just leave it for someone to tell me if it's weird. Yeah, eventually, I'll write something on the exact skills and what they do and it'll (sort of?) even out a bit... just a bit... [I'm tweaking some of them before they become really important because one of them literally was remove one stat. Like an entire stat (including health, which is like instant death)] Otto's is kind of essential for another reason... (I should probably tweak it too), but ehhhhh OvO. Thanks a lot for the review, you've addressed a lot of the issues that I've been pretty worried about and I'll get to fixing them right away.