Thats really adorable! Even though some of the writings are in a little bit of mess, story itself is really good.You should also work a little bit on dialogues.
Thanks a lot! But meh, mind is a chaotic mess. ;-P
And that's what my wife helps me do in my other story. This one is a solo job. :-) so yeah, I know I am not that great at dialogues even though I love it.