Review Detail of TaintedMetal in The Awakening

Superb. You got the storytelling skills, the great updating schedule, as well as the ability of crafting characters and showing their traits to the reader (instead of telling) The only thing that's offputting about this novel is the number of larger paragraphs, paragraphs that consist of too many sentences to the point where it looks like a large mountain of text. Regardless if the reader is reading on computer or mobile, I think it's best to cut down the paragraphs; give them space so it's easy on the reader's eyes. Other than that, all else is good.