Overall this story is a great beginning! The characters and world are engaging and interesting despite being a litte derivative but also that comes with the territory. Needless to say I enjoyed my time reading very much and look forward to where this goes. I would suggest just proofreading or getting someone else to proofread for grammatical errors such as the lack of “s” on some words and changes in tense.
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