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2022-01-12 14:17

read the first couple chapters and while the ideas seem interesting the execution (at least in the first arc) isn't the best in my eyes. hard to read and understand. I think this story would benefit from an editor or just a quick look through to make sure everything is ok. the mc seems interesting but choppy? one minute he's lazy and then me next he's murdering people. one minute he's this master manipulator and then the next he offers to let some dude kill him. IDK maybe things will be cleared up in the later chapters.

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