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PhotosphereLv143yr
2020-12-29 04:37

This is a good one, the concept of 'Group Chat' seems to be getting famous, we can congratulate Akikan for that I guess, even tho there is a Chinese novel of a group chat, that's like sht compared to Akikan's fanfic. Writing Quality: Bad, bro you need an editor, how the hell do you forget your own characters' names? Is it Catherine or Christine, decide. Stability of Updates: Amazing, do you even sleep fam? Character Design: Some of them are not really that loyal to their originals like CYC but despite that, I like this CYC more than the original one. World Background: Not really that much taken into consideration. First: I don't like that MC became handsome... Let me explain, I didn't like that he was being called ugly all the time either but I believe you could've just stopped doing that and leaving him a little ordinary. Of course, he has to be strong but that doesn't really mean he has to be handsome. You did really well in the strength increase, I like that he trained, I like that he began weakly, I like that he lost that battle against those demons and stopped relying on Yuechan, all that you did perfectly. But you had to mess it up by making it handsome, losing a big chance for comedy. Imagine the Young Masters faces when the strong chubby guy has the devoted beauties. What a great face slapping material and you let it go just for self comfort, or to appease the audience. I don't know who the harem members will be, I guessed it was going to be all the members of the chat group but now I can see that isn't really the case, I'm not convinced with Rias and Miza, don't know if you made it so that Rias will end up with Issei, I'm not really against it. As for Miza, leaving a whole year with him yet not showing any feelings and also Yuechan didn't mention her with Nezuko on that 'show who's boss' comment. I'm OK with him not getting them all for many reasons First: The development with Chu Yuechan I would not call it perfect but I liked it quite a bit, they make a really nice couple. Second: I don't mind the other girls being in relationships with other guys as long as their intimacy and relationship progress isn't shown, if they're not in the harem, that's just not our business. Three: I like small meaningful harems. But you really make it hard by putting both DxD and ATG in the same fanfic. Seven Fairies, Mu Bingyun, Mu Xuanyin, Chi Wuyao, The Witches, LDE, Su Ling'er, Feng Xue'er, Qianye Ying'er, Shen Xi. Kuroka, Grayfia (don't think I didn't notice the colons you put in the 'Husband'), Akeno, Yasaka, Ophis, Tiamat, Suzaku, Lavinia, Rossweisse, Ravel, Koneko... You make it hard to choose. Overall sir, a great novel, the only thing you need to improve in my opinion is grammar.

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amaturewriter
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Why are u hiding this ??? its not even negative? this is.. not the previous. heads up [spoilers? not much really ] Other than the grammar and English being slightly off, its all good. tbh, its fine. As for the FF, its perspective. First off, The MC stating characters world is fiction of the bat and them being surprised but accepting it, not only me but even the MC of the ff was surprised by it...lol. Also him more or less showing some of their futures. theres that. You want a ' chat ' style story, then this is good. Harem..well the potential love interests are all characters that people love, so its all cool. plus cultivation world is there with anime. kinda new I think, well new for me cause I only read another ff of this type, and that didnt have it. if you want something new, not this. there are a lot of these ff here. The characters personality that they are presented is more or less complete OC with a few quirks of the OG, rather than being reminiscent of the OG. like its entirely different. The characters also have jap female characters ' character ??' like the baka or hmph or ice beauty thing or ara ara. Theres also the slight logical thing off, which is that all the characters are accepting this entire situation..ie: accepting to join a chat group to give u power and converse with random people...and the entire technological thing.. but I guess can be ignored for a bk of this ' genre ' or plot. The characters dialogues are cringe or exaggerated. now whilst I understand, this is meant to be reminiscent of the OG's, it feels too exaggerated. the screams, fu fu fu's or ara ara aras, shit like that are too much for, And in turn it makes them seem like the female types of anime [ u know semi to full, tsunderes , cool beauty and shit ] than the actual character Then MC, I cant say anything. This bk is written with the mindset that the readers know what its supposed to be, so it just immediately goes into plot. MC get app--->talk chick--.> get em*----> ,,,,,etc. But so far, he is bland, he has nothing interesting or new. typical semi shy/confident/horney protag......his manly/cool moment didnt come yet [ as of C13-C14 ]honestly, in this bk, it might the chicks and them talking rather than the MC, thats interesting. basically, u want something new...might not be for you. u want harem and chicks, yup. and system and chat. yup. character development, well it all went to hell with what I mentioned in the start. I am not saying its shit, but that .the force of the plot is here rather than actual character growth. characters accepting them being fiction, and all that shit. hopefully individually for each one, it will improve, but foundation is lost cause an important moment is lost and completely moved on. like MC showing pic of em immediately next chp. and them surprised but then asking for his pic and then saying bye. literal jist of what happens. so yah --------- pumpkin

keke171
keke171Lv4

interesting start, it becomes a disappointment later my native language is not English so there may be some broken English I hope you don't waste much time like me reading 70 chapters of it MC was a shy and fat ugly boy with a poor family who likes one of the most beautiful girls in school (somewhat cliche) , he receives the group chat app and installs it, sends the anime and manga about the future of the other members (Chu yuechan de atg, aqua de konosuba, and Rias do DXD) of the group as if it were normal, they have no shock reality or doubt its existence, the MC doesn't even care to think of a credible excuse like "the world he is in can see the past, present, and future of other worlds" or something, no, he simply sends the information to them and is surprised when they don't have a reality chock, this is very strange. he goes to kimetsu at yaiba on a mission with chu yuechan learns breathing and cultivation techniques with yuechan, becomes her boyfriend, muzan is actually a miza in this world thanks to a gender bender that the author gave him, miza is actually the wronged one of this world and is invited to the group chat afterward, which I expected, "girls chat group" is obviously only going to have girls for MC. he becomes beautiful thanks to the cultivation and when he fuses with the physicist of Gilgamesh as a reward for completing the mission; his personality changes extremely fast and from a shy boy, he becomes someone ready to kill, he cultivates super fast bcz he is a genius with 54 open veins along with super resources that yuechan gave him and become OP, goes to tales of demons and gods and acts proudly, arrogant and carefree. kills enemies and monsters without any emotional shock or something in his first blood, he becomes a professor at the orchid institute (Nie Li school), but he is not at all suitable to be one, he teaches kimetsu breathing technique in yaiba instead of cultivation, the difference between the atg and tdg cultivation system is barely explained, the MC thinks that soul strength is equal to physical strength, he also favors pretty girls over other students extremely clearly, he is not even ashamed to admit that he favors girls beautiful than the rest, instead of being impartial as a teacher should be, MC buys heavens feels from the chat store, achieving immortality as well as selling nie li's temporal book pages to the chat without worrying about studying them and their concept of time they have. Women easily fall in love with the MC (including those from the chat), sometimes the author writes "bla bla" literally instead of putting a sentence that represents a long conversation, and places several notes in the middle of the chapter. the excuse to increase the harem until it reaches infinity is that chu yuechan, his girlfriend from the world of cultivation, even though she is of a higher level of cultivation, cannot satisfy him sexually, besides accepting dozens or hundreds of women in the MC harem ( it hasn’t reached so much yet it will certainly arrive) because its normal in atg world for men and so on. another important note is that the author admits to not even having read atg. if you want a decent story with character development, slow and gradual romance, realistic harem (nobody just accepts a harem out of nowhere, least of all because that person cannot satisfy another sexually, would you share your partner with several other people easily? no, if you answer yes to that question you have strange ******** fetishes), characters similar to your originals, or realism in general, then no, this story is not for you but if you want an arrogant super op MC with dozens of women who fall in love easily with him as he travels between the worlds collecting them like a master pokewoman trying to complete the Pokedex, then this is for you and I would even recommend other almost identical fanfics with the same "qualities" that I had the sadness of reading dozens to hundreds of chapters as * "time emperor (champion)" the author is obsessed with the word "champion" in addition to being Spanish and the MC being a retarded butt hunter * "Sis-Con with Dimensional Chat Group" Hypocritical and perverted MC, collects pokewomans on the left and right and when he promises to be faithful to the first girl he cheats on her in the next chapter * "overluck MC" evil MC edgelord that kills innocents left and right while collecting asses to **** later and brainwashing them (if these girls have a brain in the first place) they look like a carbon copy of each other with different names made for those with their hands on their pants, in my view, they tried to do what Cultivation Chat Group and Annihilation Maker managed to do and failed miserably.

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