Review Detail of Sadie_Cordova in Tempting My Rented Boyfriend

NOTE: I AM REALLY ENJOYING THE STORY, AND AM JUST GIVING HONEST FEEDBACK :) First off, great hook! The premise of the story is very original. I love how you make the two characters so different yet alike to each other. Now I'm going to give a little bit of constructive criticism: The characters are a little one-dimensional, as they seem to have only one motive. However, I think the plotline is intriguing, and the elements of the story are smoothly incorporated. Seeing as this is a modern day world, not too much has to be developed for it; but adding more detail about where and when would be helpful. Maybe try asking questions like, "If the character wasn't in this situation, what would they be doing?" "Do I have enough detail to give the characters a life if the plot was removed?" "What season is it, and how does this affect the characters moods and decisions?" Please keep writing, I think the story is excellent! I hope you are not offended; I merely wanted to help :)