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2022-11-12 08:01

I would say that reading this book twice does it justice. The author does state it is her first novel, (apologizes if you don’t use she/her pronouns) and you can tell at the start. It feels directionless and a little like “why is Lumielle acting this way” but, after reading up to the explanation chapter where the author explains her reasoning as to why she made the plot the way it is and owning up to her mistakes, I honestly became a bigger fan. I can see a lot of thought goes into the characters and despite the somewhat sloppy start, it’s really good. The writing makes it worthwhile. So let me start diseccting: 1. Lumielle. I agree at first I didn’t understand why she acted the way she did. Why did she put herself through needles pain because of Countess Fleur? But, honestly, seeing her characterization it makes sense to some extent. Like, she’s always been someone who lets people use her and she feels horribly guilty. It being part of her guilt and her inability to view herself as anything but a Kingmaker makes sense. Also, I currently do love the growth she is going for. I like that she has accepted that she doesn’t need to play the white lotus role. Its satisfying to see her be a villain but also understand that Aristele and people around her are important. 2. Aristele. Idk why everyone dislikes him. He’s probably one of my favorites. He’s loyal and a good character, seeing him from the past perspective and seeing what he is right now, it’s a good juxtaposition. I also would be honest if Lumielle kept me in the dark so I’m on his side. There are a lot of loose ends and some characters that vanish but I mean that is to be expected like the whole magic plotline sorta left as did Sebastian. I don’t know if I like Asterias since he also left, but I am excited to see him come back sometime in the future. I do reccomend the book and to continue reading it despite the first couple of chapters. It develops well.

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once again! thank you for the support and the in-depth analysis. i do agree there is nothing i can do but own up to my own flaws at the start of the novel, but i do honestly love "The Kingmakers Revenge" it's basically like my child at this point.

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I’m disappointed, I thought that i’d finally get a good evil female mc story but no… It’s the same old cliches, I continued reading despite the tropes because I liked your writing but this is too much. She somehow managed to make her brother the king but she blushes every conversations she has with a kid, a KID. Typical reaction for the ML I guess, I thought that I would see a strong and independent MC but no, also why is her character so inconsistent, sometimes she haters her father and sometimes she wants his love. After everything that he’s done…. I know I already said it but why is she doing the thing every female MC does when they speak to the ML. "I can’t read hin" "he outsmarted me" "he’s so sharp I have to be more careful!" and their relationship feels so forced, the moment they interacted the first time I knew this would happen but still…. I continued reading hoping for the best. But still I guess that’s what poeple like here, goody two shows MCs that is depende on the ML. Also why is she even reincarnated if she still acts like a kid? I cringe every time she calls herself evil… Please tell me it gets better, and I’ll immediately read everything and endure the start again…. My review is what I felt and not what you usually read, I try to describe my experience as vividly as possible so that Authors can improve. Hopefully this review helps you, that’d make me happy. Anyways sorry if this came out as rude but just like I said i’m explaining everything I felt without sugarcoating.

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