It has a good concept, but at the same time, the writing can feel a bit elementary. I just mean that even though it’s a story about nobility and princesses, it doesn’t sound very sophisticated.
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thank you for your honesty. I'm still learning and it's my first book in English. what do you think I should do to make it better?
omg I just saw your profile and I'm a huge fan of TXT, Seventeen, and BTS too. I'm Beomgyu, Jimin, and Vernon biased 🥰
the story is also just in the very beginning, so I would be glad if you give me any advice to get better while I'm still at the early stages of the novel 🙆🏻♀️
I think working on writing dialogue and having proper punctuation placement would be a great place to start! And maybe a littllle less cursing as it can feel a bit excessive and unnecessary at times (Sorry for the late response, I never checked my notifs lol).
Proud jin, mingyu, and soobin stan 💯
Going back to the dialouge sometimes it sounds a little unnatural. Like it isn’t really what someone would say but more of a way to keep the plot moving. I was checking out your later chapters and it has gotten better, but its still a bit clunky if you know what I mean. That being said there is less swearing which is nice lol.
aaaaaaa thank you for the feedback. when I'm done with the first volume, I'll edit it all again and try to fix everything. thank you for still reading the story, I'll try to get better 🤍
sorry to butt in, but omg, we literally stan the same three idols, they are my biases too 😭
I know it's random, but can I recommend the story of a friend? It's "Hel and the Emerald Sky City" by NastyRaven888, all of her novels are ongoing and I'm loving all of them, we're just online friends but I'm trying to help her getting more views, I'm new here. Sorry to bother.
