Review Detail of KingKris in The Queen's lullaby

Please go easy on me! I'm only a beginner at this! :) This story may seem like it was done with a lot of effort, however, you should know that I made it within two days after figuring out the existence of this app. So, if you think that it's not up to your taste, please drop it since, I don't expect anything big. However, please do tell me if you can see where my mistakes are for it would really help me. Thank you![img=recommend]